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Senses lift my skin,
Every nerve alive.
Anger makes me burn,
But it makes me feel alive.

One hand, I tremble,
Those lips, I flinch.
Intimacy won’t repair,
The damage has been done.

Every screamed and snarling word,
All the curses flung my way.
My body tangled up in you,
I forgot the venom and the hate.

Words can lie,
And touches deceive.
Falling, descending,
A shattered mess.

Echoes screech and claw,
Voices haunt the solitude.
You’re always there, even when I’m alone,
Please, just get up and go.

Don’t want another touch,
I don’t want another night.
I couldn’t stand another heartbreak,
Another selfish fight.

Cried, fought and bled,
Just to end up alone.
Gave you all I had,
Got nothing in return.

Truth behind a veil of lies,
Sincerity never touched your tongue.
Don’t care for me,
Don’t care for what you’ve done.

Broken mirror,
Jagged edge.
Shattered image,
Fractured life.

Begging now,
On your knees,
Did you just cry?
Did you just say please?

Pride screams to turn aside,
The head demands I leave,
But the heart is pleading to stay,
Just one more day.

Sincerity hits your tongue,
Desperation in your eyes.
Actions spurred by love,
And my resistance comes undone.

I always knew I’d stay,
I knew I’d never go away.
My hate for you may be strong,
But this works, because it’s wrong.
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Another addition to my 'Disasters Of Chicago' series.

I've been accused of spending too much attention on Sparrow and Danilo (guilty), and ignoring the other romantic couples (once again, guilty).
So, I decided to give them a break, finally, and focus on another couple.

Now, originally, I wanted to focus on the Alex-Indi relationship, but my bubble was burst when it was pointed out to me by my writing buddy/editor that I hadn't developed either of those characters beyond a few hazy details.
Thus, I have chosen to focus on the last romantic couple remaining, Isobel and Chloe.

This is from Chloe's point of view. Isobel is a cheating, lying, dominating bitch, and, even as madly in love with Isobel as Chloe is, she decides that she has to leave.
This action makes Isobel realise how much she really feels for Chloe (she isn't game enough to whisper the word 'love' yet, however), and she begs for one last shot.
Chloe, of course, is going to relinquish.

Oh, and as a note, yes they're lesbians.
If you have a problem with that, I respect your decision to feel that way, but don't post hate comments on my work. Respect my decision to support their way of life.
So nyah.

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Whoot! Chloe and Isobel!
Me luffs.

Adore the stanza about the shattered images, a beautiful metaphor, really, love it.

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Deadbeat In Training
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Yes, I wrote it just for you love, I know how much you'd like to tap Isobel, lol!

BTW, working on the intro piece (wh really should have been written first, but meh...), and you feature in it!
Well, in your literary persona kinda, and I've exagerrated stuff, but anyways! Yep, Pasha is in the next one!

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Whoot Pasha!
Is Ellie in there too?

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Yuppers.
You're gonna like the pair of them, I think it's a pretty fair representation of us, if a little dramatized for literary effect.

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“ Writing is like heroin. When you’re doing it you're flying and when you’re not it’s all you can think about, but no good can ever come of it and in the end it will ruin your life."
— Lisa Desrochers
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'Dramatized?'
Elaborate please...

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Well, ahem, don't get angry but Pasha, even though he is techincally you, he has been 'changed' a little.

-Pasha has a younger brother, you have an elder.
-Pasha is well, infintely smarter than you are.
-Pasha has, had, a heroin problem, and you, HOPEFULLY, have not even touched the drug. (If you have I will fucking kick your ass).
-Pasha generally tends to win in the wrestlings with Ellie, whereas you suck.
-And Elli and Pasha had their first kiss together, we have never kissed (I shudder at the thought, lol!)

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“ Writing is like heroin. When you’re doing it you're flying and when you’re not it’s all you can think about, but no good can ever come of it and in the end it will ruin your life."
— Lisa Desrochers
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Number one- Fair enough, better for plot.
Number two- Bullshit. I am so smart.
Number three- I'M A FUCKING DRUGGO?! Cool. And no, never touched it, love.
Number four- Fuck you.
Number five- Why shudder? Am I that repulsive, lol! Nah, it'd be weird, us, kissing, ew.

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You're a heroin addict, a grieving brother, a best friend, a casual drunk, Mortal Kombat warlord, and a hard worker.
That sums up Pasha.

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“ Writing is like heroin. When you’re doing it you're flying and when you’re not it’s all you can think about, but no good can ever come of it and in the end it will ruin your life."
— Lisa Desrochers
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Ha! Neat.

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